What do you think of this extract from my story? =D?

My favorite was the beginning. I loved your descriptions. It is an incredibly strong beginning because it captures interest and I instantly wanted to know who the man who left her is, why he left her and did he cause the fire? The part that turned me off on your expert was how...emo your character was. I can't think of another word to describe her. I know she's feeling numb, but that word you used "pointless" when it came to the needle instantly shut me down and I was like, "Oh. One of those stories about an emotional stunted girl who is so incredibly tragic she must be the heroine." Besides that tiny part, I thought it was a strong beginning.